Hey Yo!
Tht's my entry for Big Contest 2020. I had this idea in my mind for more than 1 year, when I first put together those 3 songs adding voices and sound effects but I only started when a friend of mine told me there was a newer series about ghost in the shell (yeah I don't watch several animes). I always loved the sound editing and creating a sort of my own song putting together those 3 allowed me to create the atmosphere I was looking for this story. As usual I spent a lot of time on this and I hope it worth it. Talking about the vid there is not much I would like to say since I honestly prefer you guys make your own idea on it, I tried to create a Sci-Fi Thriller mixing up several sources to create an "original" story, I know it's kinda long, but for those who know me, I guess you're used to it ^^.
Hope you guys like it, cya
Картинка Making Of (~4.14 MB)
Information
Anime: Arise:Ghost in the shell (movie and series), Halo Origins, Psycho Pass, God Eater, Ingress: The Animation, Original Animation
Music: Audiomachine - Deceit And Betrayal, Ninja Track - Pitch Black, Iconic Audio - Run Like Hell, Minette - Home, Leonardo Dalessandri - Watchtower of Turkey
Спасибо, сам бы я не справился)
Well, thanks, but honestly LOL
I can’t understand your last sentence but I’ll think about it, thx anyway for your honesty
But story is unclear sometimes, you sacrificed clarity in trade for dynamism. You could have lowered pace for greater clarity.
Anyways, general plot I understood is like: sick person -> is cured by cancer -> mental problems because of treatment -> suicide. I did not like the ending, she suffered so much to make a suicide? Does she deserve it?
That's all what I wanted to say.
The main problem is the idea itself.
What makes people watch shorts? One of the main aspects or “core” is the Structured narration. To create such a story, I personally see 2 ways:
1) the original animation, which allows you to structure things perfect.
2) editing with a song that does not give out all its motive and meaning in the very first minute and obviously building up something as well as you in your video.
In this amv i have to make an effort or even think of it myself, getting only full-screen text, "abstract" scenes or scenes without informative value and a little of "storytelling" stuff.
Overall it feels too separated and incomplete work, as if you simply didnt know what do you want to do yourself.
Np at all, the total opposite, I appreciate honest and direct comments, improvement came from discussion and I prefer this type of comments instead of the classic appreciation/insults
nah i dont say this is "mistake", just saying its really risky
about font, its good actually but just saying that you could make effects on your text a bit better or make it as standart (white or something)
Anyway any hate on this work, hope you get me right there
Это если не вникать глубоко, а так, автор оставил по ходу клипа всякие подсказки, проанализировав которые, можно составить более полное впечатление, например, вот этот текст (который «no one is going to read»):
https://i.imgur.com/VkmSw7U.jpg
Thx for your comment Dima, I’m the same one who joined Akross with a 11min vid, so this one is kinda normal I guess xD. I personally think we should not limit ourself to make others happy, making this shorter was a problem for me as an editor who try to bring his own idea in his vids. This doesn’t mean to be blind in front of reality and I’m well aware that once again my efforts and my idea is not going to reach everyone, and I’m ok with that because it’s part of the game and the competition so if this is a mistake, it‘s a mistake I WANT to make it for myself despite the results.
For the poster, well fonts are going to kill me, I’ve never been able to choose them xD
Полагаю в оригинале постер должен быть большего размера.
Кронер, где фулл?
https://i.imgur.com/jNuEOzK.png
Were others so bad?
PS: Не хотелось бы умничать касательно этого повода но я не понимаю почему названия клипа в самом клипе смотрится довольно таки хорошо а на постере ну совсем так себе. Конечно уважения что автор пытается работать над постерами самостоятельно но как по мне это тоже часть презентации клипа которая должна быть на уровне с самой работой, думаю это стоит отметить чтобы автор понимал что нужно улучшить в будущем
Sorry Kronor but you need to translate this
Честно говоря, смотреть было скучновато.
Bravo carlo, troppo forte
как только посмотрела клип, сразу вспомнила работу автора)
Deus Ex Machina
https://i.imgur.com/EE5keMK.jpg